It was probably pretty obvious by now, but I've been reading and editing '100 Waifus' for the 34th time for the past couple weeks. This book is not easy to read quickly, the long name galleries forbid it, but it's incredibly rewarding when you reach the last page.
As for the edits that haven't already been detailed on this 34th passthrough, I switched out an additional name, Faldio < Youta.
Faldio is a minor subcharacter in Valkyria Chronicles. He's a good looking good guy (as the name Faldio might suggest), but it's hard to believe he belongs in the fictional character hall of fame when he barely has any lines or screentime. Faldio is the equivalent of Ayumi from Pretty Cure -- a good looking good girl, but barely existent. Youta beats Faldio in every way.
Youta, the male lead of Kamisama ni Natta hi, is as good looking as Faldio. (Thanks to the key character designers and P.A. Works animators who always put their all into key series). But he also has other strengths -- he has a great, quick wit that sees him through every absurd situation, he's devoted and determined to help various girls even when it looks completely hopeless and impossible, and he has the humility to listen to others' advice and do as he's told if it can help achieve his goals. When you're just a normal high school kid leaning on others really helps a lot. Most importantly, Youta gets lots of screentime and lines for all twelve episodes of the series, making him actually exist, as opposed to Faldio whose existence is questionable.
That's actually one of the advantages of Kurama too. He's a main character in a series that lasts over 100 episodes. As a result you can get to know him a lot better than the average guy. He has many more chances to shine.
Aside from name changes I fought 'World War Even' this time through. For years now I've known that the word 'even' shows up too often in this book, but I didn't find any solution to the problem. This time I was able to delete 'evens' that served no purpose, where the sentence read just as legibly without them. When the 'evens' did serve a purpose, I tried to find alternative phraseology that served the same purpose and substituted those in. The end result was a mass culling of 'evens' from the start of the book to the finish. I even cut one from the last chapter, going to show how thorough the problem has been. 'Even' is still the most common word in the book, but it's a lot better now than before. At least it shouldn't pop up every other word now. Since this was my biggest remaining complaint with a book which I've otherwise stated is perfect and the best book ever written, you can imagine how good the book is now. The 34th edition is a huge upgrade to readability and a huge upgrade to my name gallery.
I think there were some other minor phrasing changes but none of them matter. As usual there was no actual change to the content of the story, that was already working just fine.
This book could still be improved with better names, mainly from Tales of Arise if I ever got to play it. So there is use in a 35th edition sometime down the road. But that will probably be a long time from now, so people should feel confident and free to start reading the book now if they're interested:
The long detailed sex scenes are still as erotic as ever, but what's really surprising is how erotic a few steamy sentences in isolation can be. Sometimes one impactful line is as bad as an entire play-by-play. And since those little paragraphs here and there are scattered all throughout the book you can never get away. This whole book glows pink.
Wendy's pep talk near the end of the book is the climax of the story and it really is amazing, but what's surprising about this story is how many times just a few words by a girl who doesn't get many lines can have just as strong an impact. Lisanna's confession, for instance. Or Mikan's. Or Teletha's. Or Aisia's. Or Akane's. Or Iris'. Or Suguha's. Confessions are awesome. Maybe that's the lesson to be drawn from this: Long or short, love confessions are the best words ever, and an entire book of love confessions from 101 of the best girls in imagination is the best book imaginable, it wins by default. Of course my book, relying on words like those, ends up being the best.
As usual the long length of the book and its ability to give worked examples of what it's talking about makes it the best delivery of my philosophy possible. It explains the ideal law code for a country, the ideal religion, the ideal economy, the ideal school, the ideal technology, all in a way that's easy to understand because you don't just read about it, you actually get to live it. You can look at it from the inside out. This is a fully mapped out, fleshed out world you can live in for weeks. Being long to read is a good thing, because it means you don't have to leave Paradise quite yet. You can stay in the garden of Eden. If only the book kept going forever. . .but what is there left to say when everything is already fully explained? There's no use in repetitive additional content, so until my brain grows twice as big or my life twice as experienced there's really nothing more I can add, sadly. This is the best I can do, and since that's already better than anything anybody else can do, I'm already satisfied with myself and it as is.
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