'In Another World with 100 Waifus' read and edited for the 20th time:

I've never worked on anything as hard as I've worked on this book.  That's because I saw in it the potential to become the greatest book ever written, if it were only edited and proofread to a professional polished level.  In that case, I wanted to get every single word right, so as to bring out the divine potential of the original concept.

I think with this 20th edition I've done that.  Of course, I can't confirm I've fixed everything until I check through it again for the 21st time, but I'm pretty confident.  The edits this time around were so profuse it's hard to believe there's still anything missing.

The proofreads this time included correcting spacing, punctuation, spelling, grammar, capitalization, awkward phrasing, appearance descriptions, arithmetic, age ranges, and probably more I've already forgotten by now.

There was still a lot to proofread, which makes me look pretty stupid on my previous 19 tries.  But at least now it's fixed.

The holy war on the word 'just' continued, as I eliminated at least a dozen usages of this overly used word.  Hopefully the word doesn't become painful to the ear every time it pops up in the course of the novel now (as it still often does).

I've already documented many extensive additions to the text, but here's a couple more:  This paragraph was turned into actual fluid English instead of the gibberish it was originally:

　　I loved Mumei so much.  She was graceful either in battle or while dancing with twintails in a completely peaceful setting, totally in love and totally embarrassed about it, ready to do anything for her friends and ready to rain judgment down upon her enemies.  A perfect blend of masculinity and femininity, she was capable of crying and killing in the same day.  Combined with her insane beauty of face and form. . .how could anyone ever get enough of her?  But if she was content where I'd stationed her, I guess getting to see her regularly as a Yosakoi performer was an idle dream.

This paragraph added an important explanatory detail concerning Aisia.  This is the reason she raised her hand as part of the carnal relations group -- because she did have carnal relations in Da Capo II Plus Communication, even though she didn't in Da Capo S.S: 

　　"I always thought Master should love everyone equally and make everyone happy, and now you have. I knew it from the beginning, you're the greatest magician in the world. What could I possibly complain about?" Aisia looked up at me with worshipful puppy eyes. She too had lived a double life, once as Aisia from Da Capo S.S. and once as Mysterious Girl from Da Capo II, but it seemed like her memories from S.S. predominated.

Throughout the text sentences and phrases have been variously added and subtracted.  It's too many to document perfectly, you'll just have to read the entire book to find all the changes.

Another important change was moving around children to be more closely related to their mothers.  I paired franchises more tightly, with a Rewrite mother having all the Rewrite children, a Bakemonogatari mother having all the Bakemonogatari children, and a Love Live! mother having all the Love Live! children.  Orihime was given a full slate of Bleach children to have, but there were so many Bleach children they still spilled over onto other mothers.  Sakura Kinomoto was given all the children from Clamp works.  I also put children with animal ears under the tutelage of the animal-eared mothers from Utawarerumono.

An important manner of characterizing all my waifus is by the types of children they have.  Mother-child bonds matter.  Now those bonds are tighter than ever before.

Since the 19th time I re-read and re-edited this novel, an enormous number of children's names were switched out for more appropriate ones.  This has greatly improved the book, especially the 9th and 10th borns.  The process isn't done yet, though.  Until at least Tales of Arise comes out and I can replace some of the weaker Tales children names, I can't say my fictional character hall of fame is complete.  There's still a bit more editing to go on this front, but it's infinitely better than it used to be already.

The most important edits were the various plot holes I filled in -- generally waifus who hadn't been given their due level of attention finally getting some love.  Between the 19th and 20th editions, I added material for Nozomi, Sae, Rosa, Rinoa, Lyria, Rin Tohsaka, and the Mumei and Aisia portions just mentioned above.

When there are 100 characters to juggle, it will never feel like enough time was spent on any of them, but that's why the 10 generations of children are so important.  This way the names of all 100 waifus come back up in the text spaced evenly throughout the novel, so their presence is always felt at all times.  This is another important duty of the fictional character hall of fame.  Add to that the fact that all 100 waifus get at least one spoken sentence somewhere in the novel and there should be no plot holes left.

I encourage everyone to dig in and read the book themselves, now that it's in its most polished and perfected form.  This is the best book ever written, as evidenced by the fact I was able to re-read it 20 times in little over a year, so it would be a waste not to:

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