Name Holes Filled:

A subset of waifu characters lacked last names, so when it came time for them to have children their surnames were left blank.  This felt incongruous with all the other children and unfair to them, since everyone else had clear dynastic and sibling ties but they were isolated drifters, so I made up some last names from scratch for all these children to share:

Rose Dagger

Sophie Lamb

Rydia Mist

Yuna Sea

Aruru Green

Eruru Green

Nekone Gold

Kuon Black

Deedlit Glade

Aisia Snow

Shana Blaze

Hozumi Schmetterling

Lyria Jewel

The descendants of these girls will all get to enjoy their kinship ties now, just like everybody else.  It also serves as one more chance to characterize characters who aren't often in the spotlight, so every bit helps.

It's also important for these kids to have surnames due to this scene:

     "I was born into a distinguished family.  This is my chance to show my caliber, to preserve that heritage and history of success.  I want my children to be born into a distinguished family too.  We can't be the failed experiment in this game of Civilization.  We can't let the people who hate us overtake us.  There's no future for us short of victory.  Let space ring with the name of Chrysalis!"
"Mishou!"  Cure Egret stood up with a rallying cry of her own.
"Lockhart!"  Tifa stood up, liking the sound of that.
"Irisu!"  Makina staked her claim to the galaxy.
"Ryuugu!  Tohsaka!  Sengoku!  Kousaka!  Freyja!  Takanashi!  Mayuzumi!"  The wives rose and shouted in an ever rising chorus.
The stars were waiting for us.  Noble lines that, like the Abh, would strive for glory, competing with each other for their family's legacy of goodness, for the rest of time.  Co-inheritors of heaven ranging out into the heavens.

Now it isn't just the Kousaka or the Tohsaka clan that can compete for the future, but the Green clan or the Snow clan.  Now everyone gets to participate together.  It's only fair since there's nothing inferior about being the child of Kuon as opposed to Kirino.

Another name hole filled concerns those children named after real life composers.  Previously, I had these children named after the first names of composers like 'John' and 'Joe.'  This is clearly hopeless.  There are millions of John's and Joe's in the worlds, and with that as your only clue no one would know who the child was named after.  So I also included the last names of the composers as middle names for the children to specify who exactly I was honoring.  Now it should be crystal clear.

Some children named after composers weren't given a middle name because the first name is so obvious and famous that no further explanation should be required.  Anyone named Tori is obviously referring to Tori Amos, anyone named Hitoshi is obviously referring to Hitoshi Sakimoto, and so on.  But only a few composers are so famous that first names are all you need.  For everyone else there's middle names.

Though names were the main subject of my current round of edits, other errors are also being corrected, from unnecessary words and inaccurate appearance descriptions to capitalization errors, so the book is improving on all fronts.  This 14th read-through and editing run is producing dramatic results that you'd think would be impossible so late in.  The instinct to keep on re-reading until nothing feels out of place has proven itself valid.