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Wednesday, June 2, 2021

Edits Continue:

I'm up to chapter 38 (out of 57) of my 27th re-read of '100 Waifus.'  I've had to make a surprising number of edits for what was already my 26th draft.  >.<.

Some of the stuff is silly, like noticing that 'Hair color' wasn't fully capitalized like 'Eye Color' was and capitalizing for consistency's sake in my chapter 17 physical attributes list.  This is all well and good but it doesn't dramatically improve the story.

But other edits make a lot of difference.  For instance, I corrected Mylene's and Nadeko's physical descriptions in chapter 17 to be more accurate.  A woman's face is extremely important so getting any detail wrong is completely unacceptable, especially when you're supposedly describing your lover, whose face you should know better than anyone.

I clarified a line that warned about 'Muslims getting their hands on the small pox virus' to the more accurate 'the wrong Muslims get their hands on the small pox virus,' because what we're worried about is WMD in the hands of ISIS and the like, not generic Pakistanis, who have had nukes for decades now and never used them, proving there's no point getting hysterical about them.

I clarified that Gilgamesh was named after the heroic Gilgamesh of Fate/Grand Order Absolute Demonic Front Babylonia, not the devil shown in Fate/Zero forward.  I don't want anyone thinking I like anything about the Fate/Zero Gilgamesh.

(For that matter I finished my rewatch of Fate/Zero and am now working on Kaleid Liner because hey, why not, I've come this far. . .)

I corrected a joke about Illyasviel to be more sensible.  I've found that stories that joke about people being violent criminals aren't funny, they're just obnoxious, and you're left wondering why they aren't immediately put in jail.  So I certainly don't want '100 Waifus' to fall for the same pitfall.  In the slightly amended version of the joke, Illyasviel declares her violent intentions in a way everyone knows to be impossible to act upon, proving she never actually meant to go through with it:

"Berserker, wipe them out and seize Onii-chan for ourselves."  Illya commanded with spinning eyes.  Luckily Berserker hadn't been imported to Eden in the first place.

It's okay for Illya to wish she could kill everyone else in the room and be done with it, but it's not okay for her to actually act upon that wish.  With this edit she sticks to wishing which is plenty funny enough.

By the way, when the same joke is made later on with Louise, she also has no possibility of going through with her threat.  If anyone knows the rules of void magic, the incantation takes minutes before a spell can take effect.  So her attempting an explosion on the boyfriend right in front of her by beginning the spell is something she knows he'll never let her get away with and will never actually be cast.  It's just another tsundere method of communication.  So I did not have to edit that joke.

If there were other edits I guess they were minor enough I've already forgotten them.  But there's still 1/3 of the story to go, with many more potential editing opportunities, so this is a pretty important 27th draft.  I'm glad I took on this task because it's already proven itself vital.

Another benefit of editing the book now is a new reader has started reading it now (by complete coincidence, I started my re-read first) and slathered it with lots of new favorites (hearts, essentially 'likes' that can be given on a chapter-by-chapter basis.)  It's nice to think that it was partially thanks to my improved edited version of the story that it went over so well.

Kanojo mo Kanojo, The Eminence in Shadow and Shikkakumon I expect will reach my top anime rankings, but I honestly don't think any other series will.  Nothing of note has been announced besides these three.  I don't see how Kamisama ni Natta hi can ever be displaced.

The future of anime will be lots of sequels to already established great franchises, lots of nonsense that will never compete with the ranked series I already have, and a few miraculous surprises like Shadows House.  Miracles don't happen often enough to knock out someone ranked #183.  I suspect in ten years there will be no new franchises entering my rankings, the entire list will be full of such solidly good shows that nothing more could pry its way in.

The other issue is that in ten years all the famous authors of today -- Mitsuru Adachi, Rumiko Takahashi, Akira Toriyama, Ken Akamatsu, Eiichiro Oda, etc., will be retired or dead.  No new talents could possibly replace these people.  They practically invented manga from scratch.  Once their pens stop greatness stops with them.  (Hiro Mashima and Takahiro will probably still be writing Edens Zero and Hinowa ga Yuku! ten years from now so their relative youth changes nothing).

I hope my top anime rankings reach 10,000 episodes in number, but I expect that to be due to sequels and spinoffs, like Love Live! Superstar, not due to wholly new ideas.  In an environment like this Kamisama is quite safe.  I think we're living in the twilight of all good things and that includes otaku culture -- after all, even if all else stays equal, the population of Japanese youth, both the consumers and producers of otaku culture, is continuously shrinking.  One way or another anime is doomed.  Feminism dooms everything.  But on the bright side, it makes my top anime rankings more reliable and less subject to churn.  I'd like an 'eternal rankings' I didn't have to update every few months, and I'm sure readers would benefit from the assurance they aren't wasting their time on a soon-to-be-replaced title as well.

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